Please, help me with my poem. urgent, really urgent.?

Daisy, across the Broadway path


The girl with fame


In place of a heart





Singing out her small-town blues


Tied down to the past,


By buckle-up shoes





She saw her stars each day and night


one the walk of fame


DON’T KNOW WHAT TO PUT HERE








then i need a few more verses


to set a scene and give some idea of story





then this will be the last verse:





You always wanted to be a star,


You were my star


You’re fallen now.

















please understand that im only 13, so i know it isnt great


i just need to get it as good as i can be


i know what i want to say


just unsure of how to put it across.


thank you in advance.

Please, help me with my poem. urgent, really urgent.?
trying to keep sane
Reply:it great
Reply:this is a really good poem but a hard topic!


%26quot;on the walk of fame


a feeling she long desired


now living the dream





dreamful nights as my precious star


distant, hard to reach in the sky


she stands in her fame


looking down unsatisfied





a dream come true


but a feeling of misery





Always wanting to be a star,


You were my star


You’re fallen now.%26quot;





its really bad and not following witht he story but im trying to help!
Reply:Well, after the %26quot;on walk in the frame%26quot; you should say umm... have you asked your mom!?



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